When you come to me
Bring a pair of eyes
So that I can see the world differently
When you come to me
Bring a bundle of smiles
So that I can feel happiness one more time
When you come to me
Bring a piece of hope
So that I can hold onto life
And a piece of the sun
To light my inside
By Farida
Photo by Staff Sgt. Kaily Brown
Absolutely beautiful writing dear Farida. .I am deeply touched. .be brave sweetheart and endure. .with much much love from the other side of the world. .in Ireland. ..I worked in Afghanistan and I miss you beautiful good people
I can feel sadness and longing in your words – and also hope. A short poem but amazingly powerful.
I KNOW I FEEL YA
Dear Farida, may all of the gifts you name in your poem come to you, one by one, and bring a healing grace to you wherever you are. Your writing is so fine and poignant – it brings a tear and a smile, both at once, to my heart. Thankyou.
It’s amazing how such a short poem, could have SO much meaning to it! I must say that I am truly touched by your writing because it helped me get a sense of what you are truly feeling. I pray that all of those things that you yearn for, touch you and fulfill your need. There is no better way to express your feelings than through writing and, my dear, you have a true gift for this. Keep the hope and stay strong!
Short in words, but very big in emotion. I think the use of anaphora in the beginning of the tercets and quintets made it more impactful.
You are so right.
It’s impressive to see how you describe hope in his most pureness
aspect. Only with sentences, repetitions and simples words. you express yourself, and you don’t need a lot to share a message, an emotion. You truly are talented. Because it’s something to express yourself, it’s something to explain a feeling, but its something else to do it well, its something else to do it beautiful. If you are as beautiful as your poem, you certainly are a wonderful person.
It is a great poem and it is really important for people to keep hope in their mind. Hope is a great thing and it inspires people, give them the force to take a step forward. It can not only benefit one people but also transfer to others. I really like your poem and the picture, I think it is really unique and great to have portrait people in this way. Really appreciate for you to sharing your poem and it is really a great one and the words are so powerful which impressed me.
Dear Farida,
Your poem is truly beautiful. You are able to describe the virtue of hope and demonstrate how it should be reflected in everyone. In times where nations and societies seem to be divided, poems and works of literature like these remind us of what it is to be a kind, decent, caring person that inspires and gives hope to others. Your use of descriptive language and poetic devices exemplify this by giving a very clear picture to the reader of what hope really means. Please continue to write more poems and literary works, as they are very enjoyable to read!
Dear Farida, it such a beautiful poem that you describe the power of hope in everyone’s heart. Although it’s short, it contains substantial amounts of your emotions. Hope is being able to see that there is light despite all of the darkness. I love your poem so much that your poem definitely gave people the power to step forward. I could also feel the longing and sadness in your poem especially the line it says “Bring a bundle of smiles So that I can feel happiness one more time”. Really appreciating that you are willing to share your poem, it gave me so much power after I read your poem. Hope you could continue writing more and more poem and literature work in the future.
The poem is definitely beautiful! I am very touched after reading it. I like how you demonstrate your hopes. You have a great talent of writing since you are able to express yourself well through only simple words and and creating very impressive sentences! While going through the lines, I can see that you are eager to see the outside world. It is always good to keep hopes, because that is what makes people to pursue better life. I hope that all your hopes can be fulfilled on one day. I hope you can get everything you want to have. Stay strong and be optimistic always!
As an old saying goes, if there is no hope in the world, then there is no future for humans. I do think hope is one of the most significant things in our life. I really like your poem, which describes the hope visually. I also like the ending, which says that you are able to hold the piece of hope onto your life, and the sun can light your inside. From your poem, I can easily imagine a picture of hope. You did convey your imagination to the readers clearly. I hope you can continue to write more poems. Never give up hope!
Dear Farida,
It is a such beautiful and powerful poem that describes the power of hope, which is one of the most important things in this world. I believe that people are not truely alive without hope. The short sentences and simple words contain many emotions, and I also like the picture with the poem. I think the picture shows the main idea of your poem, hope. The happiness on the little girl’s face makes me feel both happy and sad, the smile shows what hope can bring to us. I hope you can continue your wiring and write more good poems.
Abby